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 Tim McGraw being interviewed.

      I found while I was reading, that it isn't always the best to assume things about what a person does while you're observing them. This is the primary reason for interviewing people when trying to observe and learn about a certain area, person, company, etc. It clarifies all your uncertainties, and will give you a clearer representation of the thing you are observing or studying. You need to ask both open and closed questions while interviewing people. Open being there is no one answer, you can make a conversation out of these answers, and they lead to other questions you may not have thought to ask at first. Then there is closed questions, basically they turn out to be yes or no answers or numbers, they are very concrete based questions. It is very important to listen to their answers, especially the open questions that you ask. The person you are interviewing may have some details you would like to know, and you don't want to miss them.
    While I was reading "I Can Read I Can Write" by Jennette Edwards, the way she interviewed and how she put it into the essay was clear, and it flowed well. She didn't just put in Lee's answers to her questions in Q&A format. She just put his open answers in as if he just said them himself without her asking him. It works really well with the flow of the essay.

Interview response

I was surprised to read about the history of bowling when I started reading this. I though to myself, wow, I never knew this stuff before, but I think that the history really ties into the rest of the essay well. There is a lot of clear descriptions which is also very nice for this essay, it adds more than just a simple interview. "This is a lively group of women that are welcoming with warm and friendly smiles." (Williams 2) is great because I know what kind of people she is currently surrounded by. Especially the details about the woman from team Ruby that she speaks with, how some were friendly and others were not friendly and just gave her looks. That i find is important. Just because it makes it more real, because there are different kinds of people.

Within all of the description there are things you find out about the bowling alley itself. About how there are Men's and women's teams, as well as an arcade where all the kids go. Then even one of the owners mentions her kids bowl as well, i mean nothing less was expected probably, but it's nice that it is mentioned. The bowling alley is family and friend oriented. The clues are laid out very well, and the details are still great.

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Tillinghast Dining Hall 6:35 PM

Well lit

immediate smell of food

meatloaf-main course

Female green American Eagle shirt line for meatloaf

changes her mind and turns around

goes to get a sandwich

gets a wrap, toasted

Male plain blue tshirt skinny

@table with 2 other people

laughing with food in his mouth

gross, impolite

Hall is very empty

Blue shirt guy gets chocolate ice cream

eats like an animal

Girl with green shirt realizes she forgot a drink, gets soda, no ice

Sandwich counter guy looks new to the job

fumbling over everything

doesnt know where anything is

Frustrated

Hall Empties quickly

soon, i'm the only one other than employees

and 1 other girl w/ laptop

lots of papers

busy

female brown hair

black tshirt

jeans

Entire hall has no food

Employees are cleaning up,.

Lay of the Land Example

While reading Nicole's example of the Lay of the Land essay, I seemed interested by what is going on in the bowling alley. I could almost see the alley in my head. The essay was very descriptive, and talked about all the different aspects of the bowling alley itself, it was definitely well written, and I enjoyed reading it. The way it is started off with "It is 7:16 on a Monday night, and as I enter the brightly lit alley" (Williams 1) I was instantly pulled into it. It's like a story has begun. The use of adjectives used are necessary with an essay that requires you to write about the "lay of the land". She says "The sounds of shoes sliding against smooth wood lanes and bowling balls rolling like thunder then slamming against multiple pins rings in my ears" (Williams 1). This sentence is filled with adjectives that give me a great idea of what I would hear as well as what I would see if I was there. She talks about the people there and describes them as well. She talks about the different teams and the employees. These are also necessary when trying to figure out what the "lay of the land is".

Coffee Haven- Holliston MA.

Coffee Haven is a small coffee shop located in Holliston, Massachusetts.  When I was in middle school and even elementary school, it was the "cool" place to go to after school on Fridays.  It's nicely located in the middle of town, right down the street from the middle and elementary schools. They of course sell coffee and very typical coffee shop goods like bagels and muffins. The strange thing, though convenient, is that they sell books of all kinds. Best sellers, summer reading books required by the schools, cooking books, political science books, children's books, etc. Coffee Haven often hires some high school students to work after school and on weekends. I hadn't been there since my first semester of senior year in high school, I would sometimes go to lunch there since it was 5 mins away from the high school, and during lunch since you only have 20 mins, you could get there, order, and be on your way back to the school in enough time.


Some things I would like to know about Coffee Haven is what makes you qualified to work there? My reasoning for asking this would be that whenever I saw people from my school that worked there, it was generally the smarter kids, the ones that got good grades. I'm curious to know if their qualifications have something to do with what the potential employee gets fro grades. I also would like to know when their busiest hours are, and when their quietest hours are. How much training do you need in order to being working? Who is the owner? Which kinds of people mostly go to Coffee Haven, meaning what age of people? Do you get a discount if you work there? Is Coffee Haven still the same kind of "hangout" as it used to be for me when I was younger?

Friday Night at Iowa 80

While reading Iowa 80, I thought a lot about the imagery the author used. He used a lot of sensory details, and it  made me feel as if I was there, conversing with the people, and even just people watching. Observing how they would function, and just how the truck stop functioned. Everyone was like a family, it seemed. To me, it gave me the feeling like I was at a small town coffee shop, much like the one in my hometown. Everyone got a long and laughed with each other, just like a family.

I liked when the author was describing when he met this guy named Gordy. He said "Gordy spoke with easy affability, and underneath his three say growth of beard, I detected once boyish good looks reminiscent of the actor Lee Majors".(Feildworking: Zollo 30) I was very impressed with his details. I could see exactly what this mans face looked like. He goes on to describe the rest of this man saying he was "a vetran with 22 years of service on the road". (30) Clearly this man is an older man.
While the people of The Iowa 80 truck stop are important, it is also very important to get a feel to what the place looks like, and he does a great job. Overall, i think the author, Rick Zollo, does an outstanding job describing this truck stop. This is a video of the Iowa 80 truck stop

ENGLISH 102: Writing 2

I am now starting a new English class. I am happy to say it is with the same professor, Nicole Williams. Everything I post from now on is part of my English 102 class.

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The Lion King Movie Review

Recently I had just re-watched The Lion King for a millionth time and I was again absolutely pleased. As a child it was my all-time favorite movie. Allers and Minkoff do an extraordinary job with all the symbolism of biblical references and a mock of Shakespeare's Hamlet. Rated G, The Lion King is animated beautifully, the language is just perfect for children to understand and relate, and also the morals taught in this movie is perfectly appropriate for any age. Children will love it, as well as their parents. The characters were perfect, there is a serious matter in this plot, as Mufasa, the King of Pride Rock, was killed by his brother, Scar, while Mufasa's son, Simba, is convinced it is his fault and runs away fearing he will be exiled by the kingdom. He is found by the comic characters, Timone and Pumba, a goofy pair, past out in the middle of the desert. Simba is then taken in by them and ignores his past. As I watched this movie the only downfall i had found was the music. This particular movie didnt need all the disney musical nonsense. Though some of the songs are very catchy, like "Hakuna Matata". Children will love this song as Timone and Pumba sing it. Even if the music in this move aren't 100 percent, the animation, plot, characters, make up for it.

Key components for an Essay

For any essay, you'll need to have some key components. You'll need to have a title, a thesis, an introduction, transitions, and a conclusion. These 5 things are very important when writing an essay, they help it fit all together perfectly. The title is like the first thing the reader is going to see, and it will determine whether or not they are even going to pick up your essay. You'll need to make sure that it draws the readers attention and that it isn't boring, make it clever, but mature, not whimsical or suggestive. You're also going to need to make sure all the punctuation is correct. Next is the thesis which is also very very important, it must be on topic and tells the reader what the argument of the paper is. Throughout the paper you will be supporting and proving this. It must be straight and to the point. The thesis can be found anywhere throughout the paper, it can be found at the end because you are working up to proving it, or at the beginning where you could state it, and then prove it as you write the essay. Next you have an introduction, in here you will find an interesting paragraph or more about the background information of the topic, you will need to find a way to make it grab the reader to make him want to read on. Try starting it off with a question or interesting fact about the subject matter, that could help grab the reader's attention. When moving on from the introduction, youll need to transition your paragraphs smoothly. Even more than paragraphs, you'll want to make sure your sentences flow and transition well. Finally, you will have a conclusion. This closes your essay, and it summarizes it all up, but you don't want to be repetitive. Try to put some new information about previous topics you discussed in the essay, in your conclusion so it s new fresh information. You want you essay to go out with a BANG, you you will need to make it interesting. Don't let the essay just die out, this is what the reader will remember. It is what they are left with, what is most fresh in their minds when they have finished, make it interesting.  After having all these components in your essay, it will most likely now be a good one.

Rhetorical Analysis

While reading about rhetorical analysis, I honestly did not really understand what their purpose was, or even what a rhetorical analysis even was. Though when i got to the part about what their purpose was in the reading, i think i started to put things together. I understand what tactics are needed when writing a rhetorical analysis. You will need to understand the text very literally, meaning, takes words literally, and be able to understand what the author is writing about, why they wrote it, and who they wrote it for. Also when writing a rhetorical analysis, you must understand the audience you are writing for.  Structure for the rhetorical analysis is also very important. You'll need to first develop a thesis. Then build off your thesis.  Your introduction will lead to a claim, and develop an argument. Second you'll have to find a few supporting reasons and support then with textual evidence. Then you'll need to wrap it up with a conclusion. Another thing you'll need to add is a style and design to the rhetorical analysis. There is high style, something very formal. Then there is middle style, something that is less formal and more public.  All these things tie together to make a rhetorical analysis. Personally, the concept behind it seems a little difficult to create. There is a lot of critical reading skills involved, but it seems like if you take it step by step you will make a good rhetorical analysis.

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"Smoking: A New Discrimination" response

The information the author, Mary Klenowski, gathered from journals, books, and magazines was very interesting. Her essay seemed to make a lot of sense. People get fired because they smoke all the time. And even though i'm really not a fan of smokers, there is no reason they should be fired. The business' reasoning being that their health is in danger and it causes the health insurance to go up, is not reason a person who smokes  should be fired over a person who eats junk food and is obese. That just doesn't make a lot of sense. The obese person has the same amount of risks as a person who smokes. The people getting fired aren't smoking on the job. It's on their own time. They aren't endangering the building by setting it on fire. The business cant take control over what people do on their own time. We'd turn into a "totalitarian dictatorship".

Feedback for Visual Literacy Narrative

I chose to comment on the reading Visual Narrative because i loved the way it was done. The staged videos worked well for the movie, and the black and white color choices showed that it was in the past. Then as the color changed to be in color, i knew he was going for the present. i loved his font choices and audio. The font choices were easy to read and he put just enough writing on each part. The audio started out sad and had a feel that he was concentrating. Then suddenly the pace changed, it worked out really nice as the transition to when we got all the questions right. The ending where he listed his accomplishments was nice as well. The overall project was very well done.

Literacy Narrative Project

I'm  doing my literacy narrative project on how i learned sign language to communicate with infants. I had to learn it in order to teach the babies how to communicate. As babies they don't know any words, and they have a harder time being able to say them. So the daycare told us we should teach them sign language. They didnt need to know how to form sentences or anything like that. But they learned simple words. I already knew some sign language because a friend of mine is deaf as well as some of her family members. I know how to interpret it better than how to do it. Though, i know a lot of words, but nothing close to the amount of words in the dictionary. I know how to say any kind of family member. I know how to say some kinds of food, animals. I can say things like "More" "Pacifier" "Bottle" "Tree" ect. I plan to make a movie on this, thought i may just use the power point since i know it a lot better. Not quite sure about how it will all play out just yet, though it's still floating in my head. I want to incorporate some music and obviously some words and pictures or infants using sign language. Thats mostly all i have so far.

Malcom X

Malcom X had an extraordinary experience in prison. Usually, when you hear about people going to prison, they tend to pick up a hobby. The hobby he picked up, learning words, writing them down and trying to memorize the dictionary, not a very common hobby.  He was never really literate, then leaving jail, he was very literate and became a very famous public speaker and human activist. This is very inspiring for me to be honest. I don't think I could've done that, learned the entire dictionary. Though, if i was in jail for a long time, its possible i might have taken it up. But since i'm not in jail, i don't find the need to learn it. I can communicate in a few different ways so i don't feel like i need to learn the entire dictionary, even if it would make me sound a lot more educated. I am fine with how educated i am now. Maybe people would think higher of me, but I'm comfortable with the amount of education i have now in the English language. Though when i'm in school i will be learning more, but probably not the entire dictionary. I could learn how to use the descriptions he uses in his writing. It is absolutely marvelous the amount of description he uses. The way everything flows and paints a picture is beautiful. Something i would like to inquire into my writing.